Beneath these clouds of darkness
Once came a white young pigeon
Closing his wings as soon as he reached me,
He matched his tender eyes with my blandness
Realizing his contrast with my heart,
I inquired in astonishment, "What brings you to me?"
Without answering my futile interrogations,
He smiled and just smiled to me in parts
Vexed, I stood up and started walking away
Small white man kept sitting on my shoulders
Deciding to finally get rid of him,
I kept looking right in his eyes with sway
Within few minutes I had a smile shining
It was either cuteness or his determination
I looked up and clouds began to shy away
It was either cuteness or his determination
I looked up and clouds began to shy away
For this whitey was my silver lining
Gazing at the brightness which now lit me, I asked him hoping that now he'd answer, "Who're you? Who sent you? How did you manage to make me smile even in these dark times?". He didn't answer, yet again.
Instead, he took a huge leap in air from my shoulder and looking towards my lit eyes, yelled to me:
> उड़जा बनके धूप का पंछी छुड़ाके गहरी छाँव अंधेरी, छाँव अंधेरी|
13 comments:
What did he yell? In English, please? :-) BEAUTIFUL writing and I love the subject and image! Heavenly post :-)
Hey Fiona! You NEED to learn Hindi! It's one of the most sentient languages! I'm on for teaching you. ;)
In English he yelled: "Just fly being the bird of the sunshine leaving the deep darkness, deep shade."
okay... first of all, your rhyming schemes are always very distinct!
This time you used abca.. which is quite unusual.. and yet it did not hamper the beauty of your poetry.. :)
lovely
:)
Thank you Saloni! Your comments too are always distinct. And this time it started with 'okay'. ;)
I'm very happy that you liked it. :)
So refreshing and mesmerizing. A perpetual, somewhat muffled smile was what this post brought to my face. Not because I didn't like it. But because I was in a totally different mood before reading this, and certainly relieved/happy after reading this. :)
I am lucky that I got a friend who writes so good.
P.S: I was busy, nowhere apparently. But couldn't read your posts, hence the late comments.
Hey Rachit,
Have been seening your blog for the past few days, must tell you its a beautiful blog, very well made and beautifully written too!
Have enjoyed reading all that you have written till now....waiting for MORE :)
@Usama: I needn't say that your comments on every post are a prerequisite powers of inspiration and joy which always complete every post present here. I want you to read my every post until I am posting. It's necessary. Thank you for being there. I'm more than happy. :)
@Me: Thank you so very much. I'm glad you liked my eccentric style of thoughts. Stay connected and keep reading! :)
The poem is beautiful; simple and lyrical. But the thought behind it makes it a masterpiece...
Loved the way you ended it Rachit...:)
Thank you so very much Saru! Your comment makes this thoughtful post even more embellished. :)
You must not write so well and give other people a complex.
Thanks Anonymous! But your comment is making me more inquisitive to know who're you? ;)
I've read this before all right and I know I loved it (I've even 'liked' it, so where is my comment? :P), the way you just weave a beautiful picturesque story in my mind with your words!
I really have to think of new words for your creations, using 'beautiful' everytime can be a bit boring :P
@Ashna: Whoa! Thanks! Loved loved and loved your comment! :D
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